Very nicely done.
On the C&C request, I think you're getting very close on getting those segments lined up as noted in your other post. Only a minor variation seen in the picture which is great progress given the number of cuts involved. Keep up the good work!
From a personal design perspective, now that the center band has been omitted, the next step to really put this pen over the top would be to omit the metal finial and make it a closed end with a hidden clip. My opinion is that change would really round out this pen nicely.
Keep it up, looking good.