Excellent photo. My only advise would be to turn the pen more parallel to the camera and you may want to consider using construction paper as a background instead of fabric.
I like the pen, nice job. Very nice photo. I like the diagonal look to pen photography, horizontally makes me want to stand it back up and shoot it vertically. But thats just me.
Pen is gorgeous but your software abused the photo when it resized it. Look at the edges of the clip and other metal parts and you will see that they are all "jaggie". Play around with the software (or other software) until you can get it resized without visibly losing quality so the quality of your pictures match your pen.
The photo - nice clarity, but would use some sort of a stand as you want to present the pen to the viewers... and a pen just laying there doesn't do that in my humble opinion.