G'Day Sean.
From the pickies, It is not apparent if you used premade blanks or if you made the laminated blank.
I will say that the first picture looks very nice. I see no issues to be concerned of.
In the second picture (slightly more blurry), there may be a slight (very slight) misalignment evidenced with the white line, but I actually believe this is negligable.
I understand the practice of penturners being "overly critical" of our work; but in this case, I love the finished pen, and believe I would be very proud of it!
Be well.